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本文思维有全面性：既考虑到活动的知识性（讲座），又兼顾参与性（实践）与展示性（展览）；既结合北京绿色发展的本地特色，又考虑到 Jim作为外国友人对北京的认知需求，兼顾了不同的需求。
所以本文使用30余个“暗藏逻辑”词语，在操作上使用非谓语形式如下，增强英语逻辑思维的力度性。语言符合邮件往来的亲切语气，句式多样且语法规范，主要信息突出。优秀之处：表达地道（如“is expected to be of great value to you at your team by this environmental-protection activity”，“enabling people to enjoy benefit not only to their better lives but to their excellent health, in my view”）；部分内容如实践活动的具体地点，增强可行性。
内容逻辑连贯：活动形式与内容高度匹配，如讲座服务于环保知识普及，实践活动对应理念落地，成果展览实现后续传播，形成 “知识输入 — 实践转化 — 成果输出” 的完整逻辑链。本文是应用文（建议信·热点话题）
具体题目：假设你是红星中学高三学生李华，你的英国好友Jim正在策划以“绿色北京”为主题的社团活动，发来邮件询问你的想法。请你用英文回复，内容包括：1.活动形式；2.活动内容。本文是2023年北京高考真题写作，整体而言，主题契合度高，逻辑清晰，内容完善，详看如下英语写作。
Dear Jim,
I thank you so much for your e-mail，asking me for my reply to you，on your plan for “Green Beijing” about which you let me tell a lot for reference to you.
Your subject related with “Green Beijing” is quite much interesting to me, enabling people to enjoy benefit not only to their better lives but to their excellent health, in my view. This is kept in line with call for globally environmental protection, specifically speaking, to take “Green Beijing” as example.
In terms of the form of its activities, accordingly, I as one of volunteers get some funny ideas about how to motivate the advanced men and women, who come to Chaoyang Park where I asked them some questions about Eco-treasure hunt, by giving each group a list of tasks, such as collecting recyclable waste, identifying local plants, and taking photos of green spots.
After the hunt, a local environmentalist is invited to give a 15-minute lecture on reducing carbon in daily life sharing to the public.
A small award ceremony is to hold for the volunteers who wins prize for reusable bags or potted plants. I one of volunteers will have a lot of fun at this activity, in my belief, that helps them acquire knowledge about environmental protection while enjoying outdoor-activity time.
My above “Green Beijing” proposal is expected to be of great value to you at your team by this environmental-protection activity, I’m sure, that helps you with a greet success !
Best wishes,
Li Hua.
范文亮点：1. 贴合书信格式，语气亲切自然，符合好友间沟通场景；2. 活动设计具体可行，涵盖“任务+讲座+颁奖”，逻辑清晰；3. 亮点词汇/句式：“eco-treasure hunt”“reducing carbon”，体现词汇积累；4. 首尾呼应，开头肯定主题意义，结尾表达祝愿，结构完整。
总结：
《高考英语优秀范文 究竟优秀在哪里？请看本文作者写作高中英语作文》本文是红星中学高三学生李华回复英国好友 Jim 的英文邮件，核心围绕 “绿色北京” 主题社团活动，清晰给出了活动形式与内容建议。形式上涵盖讲座、实践体验、成果展览三类；内容上聚焦北京绿色发展现状、环保实践（如垃圾分类、植树）及成果展示，既贴合主题，又结合北京本地特色，还考虑到社团活动的参与性与传播性，同时传递了绿色环保理念。
编辑语：
《高考英语优秀范文 究竟优秀在哪里？请看本文作者写作高中英语作文》本文语言符合邮件往来的亲切语气，句式多样且语法规范，核心信息突出。优秀之处：表达地道（如“is expected to be of great value to you at your team by this environmental-protection activity”，“enabling people to enjoy benefit not only to their better lives but to their excellent health, in my view”）；部分内容如实践活动的具体地点、时长），增强可行性。整体上，主题契合度高，逻辑清晰，内容完善，详细看如下。
逻辑思维角度点评：
《高考英语优秀范文 究竟优秀在哪里？请看本文作者写作高中英语作文》本文使用30余个“暗藏逻辑”词语，在操作上使用非谓语形式如下，增强英语逻辑思维的力度性。
“help...with...”，asking me for my reply to you on your plan for “Green Beijing” ，about which you let me tell a lot，Your subject related with “Green Beijing” is quite much interesting to me, enabling people to enjoy benefit not only to their better lives but to their excellent health, in my view，This is kept in line with call for globally environmental protection, specifically speaking, to take “Green Beijing” as example，In terms of the form of its activities, accordingly, ideas about how to motivate the advanced men and women, who come to Chaoyang Park，where I asked them some questions about Eco-treasure hunt, by giving each group a list of tasks, such as collecting recyclable waste, identifying local plants, and taking photos of green spots，After the hunt, environmentalist is invited to give a 15-minute lecture，on reducing carbon in daily life，sharing to the public.
A small award ceremony is to hold for the volunteers，who wins prize for reusable bags or potted plants，have a lot of fun at this activity, in my belief, that helps them acquire knowledge about environmental protection，while enjoying outdoor-activity time.
My above “Green Beijing” proposal is expected to be of great value to you at your team by this environmental-protection activity, I’m sure, that helps you with a greet success !
结构逻辑清晰：邮件开篇回应 Jim 的询问，中间分述活动形式与内容，结尾表达期待，符合 “总 — 分 — 总” 的常规逻辑，让读者能快速抓取核心信息。
内容逻辑连贯：活动形式与内容高度匹配，如讲座服务于环保知识普及，实践活动对应理念落地，成果展览实现后续传播，形成 “知识输入 — 实践转化 — 成果输出” 的完整逻辑链。
思维全面性强：既考虑到活动的知识性（讲座），又兼顾参与性（实践）与展示性（展览）；既结合北京绿色发展的本地特色，又考虑到 Jim作为外国友人对北京的认知需求，兼顾了不同维度的需求。
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